God, that is just so perfect. Beautiful and sad and gritty and here I go down into keyboardsmash again AFSDHJEYR%IGDJ.
I love the tone, like a lot. It fits in with FFXIII just right, bittersweet and painful and occasionally hilarious. And the voices are spot-on -- I can hear the characters talking. And ;lkadgjskls the last line, so just right for this fic in specific and yet if you stuck a tagline on the game itself you couldn't find a better.
ASDFGHJKLSADFGHKJLYGWTKEJLKHL again.
One itsy nitpick: there are a few places where there's no capital letter at the start of a line of dialogue leading in from the narration. Other than that, we're back in keyboardsmash-perfect land.
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God, that is just so perfect. Beautiful and sad and gritty and here I go down into keyboardsmash again AFSDHJEYR%IGDJ.
I love the tone, like a lot. It fits in with FFXIII just right, bittersweet and painful and occasionally hilarious. And the voices are spot-on -- I can hear the characters talking. And ;lkadgjskls the last line, so just right for this fic in specific and yet if you stuck a tagline on the game itself you couldn't find a better.
ASDFGHJKLSADFGHKJLYGWTKEJLKHL again.
One itsy nitpick: there are a few places where there's no capital letter at the start of a line of dialogue leading in from the narration. Other than that, we're back in keyboardsmash-perfect land.